Just wondering. Oh, and, maybe good to tell, my English isn't professional, so don't get too suprised of some grammar of spelling mistakes. 22:21, August 15, 2010 (UTC) *don't get too surprised by some grammar or spelling mistakes. :) [23:56 15 August 2010] This is mine. --Some Idiot File:Image002.png 05:13, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
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| - Just wondering. Oh, and, maybe good to tell, my English isn't professional, so don't get too suprised of some grammar of spelling mistakes. 22:21, August 15, 2010 (UTC) *don't get too surprised by some grammar or spelling mistakes. :) [23:56 15 August 2010] This is mine. --Some Idiot File:Image002.png 05:13, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
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| - Averaged your scores, By the way, good quotes!
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| - Ok, so your English is not professional. In that case, I'm not going to into an overlong improvement section. But reason or not, bad spelling, grammar and jumpy, confusing style of prose isn't good and in this case has hurt your article very badly. Luckily your article looks ok, so this score isn't really low, but I want to give you a few tips. I always recommend copying your article onto a Microsoft Word and doing a spell check. However, there are even things a computer can't pick up so you should always add the tag to your article for proofreading help. I know you can fix this little glitch in your article and it will put up the quality of your article greatly.
I also want to make a few points on formatting. Just a few things, as your article doesn't look bad, but some things that will definitely help.
*LINKS!!! You know why I put that word in capitals? Because links are very important. Few things here I needs to say... 1. Your red links look rather ugly and unprofessional. Delete them. 2. Links that you click and send you to a different page to what the link says are always good. if you don't know how to do this, ask me on my talk page, or any experienced user. 3. Links add emphasis words like italics BIG LETTERS do. 4. Don't like unimportant words, like 'and' or 'good'
*Paragraphs: There's not much point mentioning this here, as I've told you to fix this in the humor section, but because your paragraphs are rather short they don't look very good.
Well, that's all.
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| - You've got two pictures. They are pretty much the same, and don't look that good. My solution - get some better captions. As your pictures aren't funny you need some funny captions. Sorry I don't have heaps to say here but that's what you need to do.
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| - Great concept, but there are a lot of thigns to do with the concept that I have detailed in the humor section. This score could definitely go up to even a nine.
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| - So, 27.5. That's just over half the highest score possible to get here. This is a good article, with a great concept, but with the certain improvements detailed in the above sections it cane be a much better article. I'm not going to reiterate much here, because I've said so much. Just make the improvements for each section, build on your article, go a bit wilder with your ideas and sort out your image, formatting and especially spelling and grammar problems. With this done this could be a very good article. I hoped I helped!
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| - Just wondering. Oh, and, maybe good to tell, my English isn't professional, so don't get too suprised of some grammar of spelling mistakes. 22:21, August 15, 2010 (UTC) *don't get too surprised by some grammar or spelling mistakes. :) [23:56 15 August 2010] This is mine. --Some Idiot File:Image002.png 05:13, August 16, 2010 (UTC) Maybe I can give a little more information here: the thing with four Finnish astronauts and combining that with Mianus is not random chosen, if someone is thinking that. The reason for that is, that Mianus early appeared at Jackass (MTV, see see here), and the four Finnish astronauts are actually from The Dudesons in America, also MTV this year, what kinda looks like Jackass, however, that producer is the same guy that appeared in Jackass (Johnny Knoxville). In an episode the Dudesons where trying to get to Uranus with stunts as training and a car with things on it, then launching it by crashing it towards a wall... also, Mianus is then a name-change of the excisting moon of Uranus, Miranda which is the smallest of the big 5, i think. Maybe with this information it makes a bit better to understand the story. Also, I think pretty quick that I can't improve it too much, then it goes too bizarre and maybe even boring when it gets too long. Also I am going to think that when I give more information about one paragraph, then it gets more information about that, than over the main subject itself. And yes, I am actually not such of that person that makes everything too bizarre or in the style of WTF is this?!. The old easy way to keep the article a bit serious while there has to be an excisting something, totally different. Images, maybe I can get something of a possible "something" that lives there. Maybe I can make the capital Middelfart], or something...combining. 12:51, August 16, 2010 (UTC)
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