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| - Comments? 15:31, November 24, 2011 (UTC) See the part that's in parenthesis? Could you either remove those and make it flow with the article, or just get rid of the statement altogether? Also, could you extend Sign of the Moon at all? 15:34, November 24, 2011 (UTC) Are there any quotes that could be used? 22:48, November 25, 2011 (UTC) Its been a week. Are you still working on this? 23:14, December 1, 2011 (UTC) If she isn't, may I take over? 22:07, December 3, 2011 (UTC) I added two quotes. For some reason, I can't find where she's mentioned in SotM. 16:43, December 9, 2011 (UTC)
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| - Comments? 15:31, November 24, 2011 (UTC) See the part that's in parenthesis? Could you either remove those and make it flow with the article, or just get rid of the statement altogether? Also, could you extend Sign of the Moon at all? 15:34, November 24, 2011 (UTC) Are there any quotes that could be used? 22:48, November 25, 2011 (UTC) Its been a week. Are you still working on this? 23:14, December 1, 2011 (UTC) If she isn't, may I take over? 22:07, December 3, 2011 (UTC) We'll give her 2 weeks in all, so if she doesn't comment by the end of this week, feel free to take over. 22:59, December 5, 2011 (UTC) I added two quotes. For some reason, I can't find where she's mentioned in SotM. 16:43, December 9, 2011 (UTC) This looks great! In the SOTM section, though, the second sentence of the paragraph doesn't really make sense because it never explicitly states what Furled Bracken announces in his speech. Perhaps you could add a little to that, to clear things up a bit? But otherwise this is a job well done, in my opinion. :) 04:47, December 17, 2011 (UTC) We're not supposed to use direct quotes, and as I already said (if you bothered to read my last comment) that I cannot find in SotM where she is mentioned by name. So, if someone can give me a page number or two, I could elaborate on that section a little better. 00:06, December 18, 2011 (UTC) Maybe make her overall history a little more detailed. 18:57, December 23, 2011 (UTC) I'm going to have to archive this, guys. This has been worked on for exactly a month, and it's still not ready. Continue to work on it, and put it back up when it's ready. 16:07, December 24, 2011 (UTC)
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