An old PLS entry of mine. -- 18:36, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Man granted immortality speaks out: "Life's a bitch"
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| - An old PLS entry of mine. -- 18:36, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
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| - Good use of quotes and geographic humor.
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| - A few of the sentences were awkwardly worded , and a couple of them ran pretty long. I also think that him blowing his head off was done rather abruptly and without much fanfare. You may want to build up to it more. I already fixed the one spelling error I could find.
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| - Though both images were well used, I don't really like the picture of Hitler. For some reason it just bugs me, probably because he has no more than a passing mention in the article and I'm not a huge fan of aging Holocaust jokes. Well done with the other picture, though you may want to shorten the caption since captions are generally supposed to be a few words.
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| - Not totally, pulled-out-of-your-ass original, but very well executed. However, the "Life's a bitch" part of title seems to be ignored or only subtly referenced until the very end.
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| - I don't think I actually laughed out loud when reading this, but I definately smiled at the references to the Salem Witch Trials and Forrest Gump. You should probably develop his presence at historic events more, since those are the parts that I enjoyed most. Million Man March, mebbe? Hell, this could probably be developed into an UnBook. "The Invincible Adventures of Washington Irving".
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| - I don't know if you plan to let this sit, give it a few minor tweaks, or completely overhaul this for VFH due to the age, but it's already very good. I don't think it's quite ready for VFH, but with a few small changes it definately will be. It all really depends on what you want to do with this. Also, if you want to make an UnBook based on this like I suggested, I'd be glad to give suggestions or work with you on it if you want. And if you don't want to make it, I'll steal it from you! Anyway, nice job overall. 'twas a pleasure to review.
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| - An old PLS entry of mine. -- 18:36, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
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