Funnybony 22:01, 7 August 2009 (UTC) I'll be giving you a review for this one. Sequence 03:20, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
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| - Funnybony 22:01, 7 August 2009 (UTC) I'll be giving you a review for this one. Sequence 03:20, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
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| - It's a decent enough article at the moment although it could still be improved a bit.
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| - Your grammar and spelling are pretty good from what I can see. You might try raising the picture of the baseball bat just a bit higher so that some text appears in between it and the revolver picture. There were a few incidents of miscapitalisation that I saw, just remember that if it isn't a name or at the beginning of the sentence, or for emphasis, then it shouldn't be capitalised. There are also two redlinks that you should edit out to make it look nicer.
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| - For the length you have I would probably add just one more picture, but since I've advised you to cut back on the total size I would actually suggest you cut back on one of the pictures as well instead. Whether you choose the one of the ant or the one with the youtube caption is up to you. The captions are alright, although the one of the revolver is the only one that really stands out. As an amendum to the comment in the concept part, perhaps you could change one of the photos to one of him in the home alone movies. I'm sure you could come up with a good caption for one where he is all burnt and had his hair torn off and clothes all slimey etc.
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| - As I said in the beginning of the humour sectin merging his acting career with his real life is a good move. He isn't all that famous, most people will recognise him from the Home Alone movies, so perhaps you could play up that aspect a bit. I don't really have much to suggest here since you have done a pretty good job parodying his acting career here.
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| - Like I said before cut down on the lists and quotes. You may want to see if you are able to expand on the other sections a bit more to compensate the loss of length. It's a pretty solid article at the moment that could turn out nicely.
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