*I think that your intro needs to have more to it. However do not make it specific. Put the comment about the navy in a seperate heading entitled "Military."
*Igneous is a more scientific term for volcanic rock .
*It needs a larger info box and more content . For ideas on content please view my Ukraine article I wrote recently.
*I haven't marked you down for this but be careful with your style of humour. Many people come to Uncyclopedia thinking that talking about sex and swearing out of context is hilarious. Unfortunately it is not but you have put explanation and context to your Playboy and sex references. Please be wary in the future.
*I like your political humour about the dispute involving a lake with nearby nations.
*Please write an UnBooks entitled: Alice im Märchenland der Sozialistischen Arbeiter. I love that book title.
*The politics section is full of great humour. Too much for me to write down here.
*Threat to World Peace was just as funny.
Very funny for a first article. I'm not sure which parts Spike was annoyed about but your revised version comes across to me as high standard work. Please write more articles.