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| - I've listed this article for peer review because I've worked substantially on it and it was formerly listed as a Featured Article. I'd like to at least see it get GA status. The subject matter is incredibly fascinating, and I'd like to get the knowledge out there, and making the article as good as it can possibly be is one way of achieving that. Farrtj (talk) 00:49, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
* "behavioural" is BritEng, if I'm not mistaken this article is probably written in USEng.File:Yes check.svg Done
* "Veterans Administration Hospital " is a dab link.File:Yes check.svg Done
* I would normally suggest using acronyms in their expanded form the first time round, like "Central Intelligence Agency (CIA)".File:Yes check.svg Done
* "other chemicals, hypnosis,[6] sensory deprivation, isolation, verbal and sexual abuse, as well as various forms of torture." odd referencing methodology here...File:Yes check.svg Done
* "for Operation Paperclip. Operation Paperclip was" for elegant prose, I would try to avoid this quick repetition.File:Yes check.svg Done
* Since you mention "Project BLUEBIRD " why isn't it at least redlinked?File:Yes check.svg Done
* MKUltra section, lots and lots of very short paragraphs, could use some merging to improve the look and flow.File:Yes check.svg Done
* "A very descriptive member of the CIA claims " Do you need "very descriptive"?File:Yes check.svg Done
* It's possibly a personal taste thing (well, almost certainly it is) but I'm not keen on the mass of text under "Goals" which I assume is a copy-and-paste. Isn't there an elegant way of summarising all that? Ah, I think the numbered points is clearer, personally. Farrtj (talk) 15:23, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
* "Could the CIA make spies out of tripping Russians—or vice versa?[31]" if this is a quote, put it in quotes. If not, it's not particularly encyclopedic language.File:Yes check.svg Done
* Link World War II the first time its used, not on a subsequent occasion.File:Yes check.svg Done
* "a point was reached where outsiders were zapped " don't know what that means.File:Yes check.svg Done
* "committed suicide or was murdered [35]" missing full stop and I think it would make a difference if he was murdered or if he committed suicide, wouldn't it?File:Yes check.svg Done
* "heroin, morphine, MDMA, mescaline, psilocybin, scopolamine, marijuana, alcohol, sodium pentothal,[39] and ergine (in Subproject 22)." again, odd referencing (i.e. pick one thing in a list of things and reference just that thing...)File:Yes check.svg Done
* No real need to link "Canada" (we tend to avoid linking major geographical entities.File:Yes check.svg Done
* Portrait images should have thumb|upright applied so they are the same size.File:Yes check.svg Done
* Isn't the fifth estate always branded in lower case?File:Yes check.svg Done
* "—[50]" why not just put the ref after the colon introducing the quote?File:Yes check.svg Done
* " United States v. Stanley" aren't court cases usually in italics (as you have for Feres v. United States earlier in the section).File:Yes check.svg Done
* Don't think you need to link prison, hospital, college, university...File:Yes check.svg Done
* Don't put items in the See also section that are already used and linked in the main article (e.g. Gottlieb).File:Yes check.svg Done The Rambling Man (talk) 08:15, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
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