So, yeah, PLS entry. Did better than I thought it would, personally. I know the ending's a little flat, but I wanted to keep something from the superior original for posterity's sake. Also, I think this "Not reviewed" thing could use a bit of touching up, personally. Looks a bit off.
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| - So, yeah, PLS entry. Did better than I thought it would, personally. I know the ending's a little flat, but I wanted to keep something from the superior original for posterity's sake. Also, I think this "Not reviewed" thing could use a bit of touching up, personally. Looks a bit off.
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| - i'm not sure how much of your prose is intentional, but i'll hold off on proofreading it in case it is. if you would like a proofread, i'd be happy to give it a once-over. sentences like 'Basically everyone on the road that you get red mist for with the greatest of frequencies.' are confusing; i'm not even sure what that means. try clarifying your prose. switch that second image over to the left, for symmetry's sake. maybe try __NOTOC__ at the top to remove that unsightly whitespace.
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| - two images, both good, relevant, good captions. you might be able to fit one more, but i think these two are fine if you don't feel like adding another. that second image is awfully big...
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| - my preview button tells me that your score is 35.4, placing your article right in the 'adequate; the average article' wheelhouse. i think that with a better tone and approach you could improve greatly. i suggest DOHS Anti-Terrorism Regulations, which i wrote as the department of homeland security issuing warnings to americans about terrorists. you can see how the tone is very formal and gets to the point. i'm sure there are other similar articles with official tones; check out UN:BEST to see. if you're looking for VFH, i think that a better tone would greatly help, along with just a bit more content and another image. good luck!
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| - So, yeah, PLS entry. Did better than I thought it would, personally. I know the ending's a little flat, but I wanted to keep something from the superior original for posterity's sake. Also, I think this "Not reviewed" thing could use a bit of touching up, personally. Looks a bit off.
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