I worked really hard on this one! Please tell me what I can do to make it awesome! Heck no techno 22:01, 15 November 2007 (UTC)
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| - I worked really hard on this one! Please tell me what I can do to make it awesome! Heck no techno 22:01, 15 November 2007 (UTC)
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| - Needs considerable improvement. I cannot stress this enough, read How To Be Funny and Not Just Stupid. If you have, read it again. And then, after you've done so, read it again. Ask , it can completely change your writing for the better.
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| - Well-written enough when it comes to the elements of grammar, but in many senses it's missing something. By this I mean that your choice of crude words and display of less-than-fantastic vocabulary leaves little to the imagination, and detracts from the article as a whole. "After graduating from high school in Strickkasaw, Lee enrolled first at the all-female DÜCHBAUGH University in Montgomery, where she legendarily had her way with every male who participated in the sports program and then continued her slutty escapades at the University of Alabama, pledging the Wii Waunaduya sorority", while being a bit of a run-on sentence, is also rather disappointing. For starters, "DÜCHBAUGH University" is a flat joke. But dropping random names and making up things like "Wii Waunaduya sorority" is less rewarding for a reader than the more promising beginning, "..had her way with every male who participated in the sports program..." Subtle, yet important change.
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| - Meh. The images that are there are, respectively, scary as hell and unrelated. The first image is just frightening, and serves its purpose well enough. The second image is completely unrelated, for the simple fact that it says "Dr. Seuss" on the bottom. If you don't own Photoshop, then consider suggesting an image for someone who does to make at Image Request. Also, there is something to be said for just using an image's caption to tell a joke based on the image.
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| - Like I said, there's potential in here, you just have to look very very hard to find it. In general, I would say concentrate more on laying out a concrete plan for what you're going to write about, rather than writing down the first thing that makes you chuckle, because more likely than not it won't appeal to very many people. Also, while the truth is funnier than outright nonsense, copying a Wikipedia article and adding superlatives and changing the numbers and the names of a place does not make it funny.
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| - I worked really hard on this one! Please tell me what I can do to make it awesome! Heck no techno 22:01, 15 November 2007 (UTC)
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