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| - I've listed this article for peer review because I need this page to be complete in every aspect. I would like to have a valuable feedback for the page. Thanks, Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 17:44, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
* I would not be able to give a detailed review, but I think honorifics like Shri and Smt can be removed from the "Standing Committee Draft Lokpal Bill" as per WP:HONORIFIC. I will recommend you to request a copyedit here, which will help you while taking the article to GA/FA status. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 11:13, 16 June 2012 (UTC) The Rambling Man (talk) 18:38, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
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| - I've listed this article for peer review because I need this page to be complete in every aspect. I would like to have a valuable feedback for the page. Thanks, Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 17:44, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
* I would not be able to give a detailed review, but I think honorifics like Shri and Smt can be removed from the "Standing Committee Draft Lokpal Bill" as per WP:HONORIFIC. I will recommend you to request a copyedit here, which will help you while taking the article to GA/FA status. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 11:13, 16 June 2012 (UTC) Hi! Please give me a week to analyze the document in detail. I will come up with my review for this article. Regards India maniac (talk) 17:44, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
* First off, is it the "Lokpal Bill" or "The Lokpal Bill"? File:Crystal Clear action edit add.png Added Comments : "The Lokpal Bill"
* There are a huge number of citations in the lead for "The journey of this bill has received widespread worldwide coverage.[16][17][18][19][20][21][22][23][24][25][26][27]", see WP:CITEKILL. File:Yes check.svg Done Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 15:35, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
* Infobox -> "A Bill.." -> "A bill..." File:Yes check.svg Done
* "Legislative History" in infobox, just "Legislative history" is fine. File:Blue question mark (italic).svg I could not understand the comment. Did you mean I should remove the text history from the infobox or something else. Please elucidate.Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 03:53, 3 July 2012 (UTC) I mean don't have a capital H for history. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
* "still hasn't reached " avoid contractions. File:Yes check.svg Done
* Table should not be overcapitalised, e.g. "Status of Bill"->"Status of bill", "(Recurring)"->"(recurring)". File:Yes check.svg Done
* "Rs. 3 lakh" meaningless to most readers, consider an inflation-linked translation into US$ or GBP or similar. File:Ambox Content.svg Need reliable source which convert INR to inflation adjusted USD or any other major currency.Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 03:53, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
* [40] - avoid floating refs, attach them to something. File:Yes check.svg Done Placed them along with table captions.
* "History of The Lokpal Bill, 2011" -> "History". File:Yes check.svg Done
* "A Draft Lokpal Bill, 2010,[41][42][43] " draft isn't a proper noun, and why citekill again? File:Yellow check.svg Partly Done Citekill needs to be worked upon Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 15:27, 3 July 2012 (UTC) File:Yes check.svg Done Overkill part done Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 15:40, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
* "Anna Hazare's hunger strike at Jantar Mantar in New Delhi." no full stop in this caption which isn't a complete sentence. File:Yes check.svg Done Updated all the images.
* "For major differences between the Draft Lokpal Bill, 2010 and the Jan Lokpal Bill, click here." we don't do "click here", either link to it suitably or just have a or something. File:Yes check.svg Done Put in See Also section
* "The Joint Draft Bill" not sure about the section starting with "The" and no need for the table to be sortable, nor have "Name" capitalised. File:Yes check.svg Done
* "was expected to complete its work latest by 30 June 2011" update please. File:Yes check.svg Done Redrafted the sentence
* "Kapil Sibal, member of the Joint Drafting Committee of Lokpal." no need for full stop. File:Yes check.svg Done Updated all the images.
* A lot of intricate detail about the various meetings. I think you should look to summarise them and create a decent single section rather than all the subsections which remind me of village meeting minutes. File:Crystal Clear action edit add.png Added Comments : The sections contain a brief snapshot the official documents of the transcripts of the meetings, what was said by the prominent people of the panel before the media and which later became headlines. I believe we can't remove them and club them into a single section. In such a situation, the proposed section would become unmanageable and unreadable.Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 15:47, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
* No reason for most, if not all, of the tables to be sortable. File:Crystal Clear action edit add.png Added Comments : Two tables are sortable as it help the readers to view the members grouped with the institution they belong to(Lok/Rajya Sabha, Congress,BJP etc.)
* "In an Open Letter To Our Leaders by a group of 14 eminent citizens (G14)" why the bold and bold links? Avoid. The title of the document was Open Letter To Our Leaders. Hence, the entire text was in bold. The link, open letter, is a part of a bold text. That is why, it is also in bold. Avoid bold links. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:22, 2 July 2012 (UTC) File:Yes check.svg Done
* (enough on the prose).
* Refs, make sure date formats are consistent throughout. File:Yes check.svg Done Made them uniform Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 15:23, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
* Eight external links here? Be judicious. Pick the really, honestly, really honestly relevant links. File:Yes check.svg Done I could remove two links, one of Parliament of India, as it only contained the links to other websites. Removing others may not be possible as the article contains content referenced from those links. The second was that of constitution of India as it was contained in the VTE separately. Vaibhavgupta1989 (talk) 03:53, 3 July 2012 (UTC) The Rambling Man (talk) 18:38, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
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