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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Chris Lawrence
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| - Pooh the hat 10:51, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
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| - Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines
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| - Hoo boy… you are seriously lacking in this department. Quite frankly, you need a heaping of help from the Proofreading service, and you need it now. Your grammar is, frankly, appalling. Only a scant few of the examples are “alone in the locker room and leaped at the rare opportunity” and “Then he gripped harder”. All across the article “I” was not capitalized
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| - The image could have stood being a little bit bigger, and I also think another one would have fit in rather snugly. To make an image bigger, insert 100px after the image name, and adjust the number until you get the desired size.
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| - A biography is very hard to make work, and at the moment, this article needs a lot of it. I have seen biographies make the front page . You have to present “information” with a straight face, throw in punch lines, and make it funny.
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| - I am going to be extremely blunt here. READ THIS. That was not advice; it is something you absolutely need to do. The grammar in this article, combined with the absence of real humour, almost drove me to give out a 0. Quite frankly, references to ones “Nackers” are next to never funny; and Gay jokes have been overdone to the point of redundancy. What Uncyclopedia needs is some fresh ideas, rather then the same ones being recycled. While you are busy improving this article, I suggest you look at some of the featured articles and see what you can apply to help this article.
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| - The first article is ALWAYS the hardest one to write, and even I am not much of a writer. I honestly never vote at VFD, and I do not think articles deserve to be deleted. Unfourtunatally, this article is close to some soul bumping into it and nominating it to be deleted, and frankly, it probably would be. Here is what you can do to fix this article up
:#Read HTBFANJS
:#Use gay jokes sparingly
:#Work on your grammar, or request help from the Uncyclopedia:Proofreading Service. If you have an English teacher, give the article to him/her and request help.
:#Add more blue links, scratch out the red links
:#Add categories using this template Insert name
:#Don’t take this review too harshly, this is your first one, and you have PLENTY of time to improve. With work, this article can easily become better. Good luck!
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| - Pooh the hat 10:51, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
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