I'm new here, this is my first article, what d'ya guys think?-- 23:14, 26 November 2007 (UTC) I'm his adopter. Note that this is not plagiarism of the other articles of a similar name, it's just inspired by them. He wanted to make a version he liked better. 00:22, Nov 28 Okay, let me try that again. Nov 28, 01:21
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| - I'm new here, this is my first article, what d'ya guys think?-- 23:14, 26 November 2007 (UTC) I'm his adopter. Note that this is not plagiarism of the other articles of a similar name, it's just inspired by them. He wanted to make a version he liked better. 00:22, Nov 28 Okay, let me try that again. Nov 28, 01:21
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| - Oh wow, I hated your formatting here. Hopefully you won't take that personally . Pictures all over the damn place. This is one of those times when I would say lose some of the pictures in exchange for article length.
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| - Too many, and they don't add anything to the article. Also, they're mixed all over the damn place. It's very ugly looking to me .
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| - This article really borrows ideas from other articles that have already been written, which is a drawback. People will notice, even if they're not regulars. Another point I might as well mention is that, in the entire article, there's only ONE sentence that has anything to do with the title of the thing! I hope you don't think this is harsh... you probably do... (sorry!)
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| - avg of each section. I'm gonna do a side-by-side comparison, just to make this really confusing. Okay, I read the original by Manforman and Thinker and it's "okay" I would say. Kinda, meh. Alright, let's look at yours...
* Intro
same intro as the other one.
* [6] Step 1: Get Arrested
It's okay. Obviously you're not trying to be hilarious here, so a 6 will do.
* Crimes…
* [7] Robbery
Yep, you had a joke. Short, though, for such a big crime...
* [7] Abortion
Well, you made fun of the South. Damn Southerners. It didn't get me to gaffaw or anything, but it was fine.
* [4] Telling the Police you escaped Prison
Really, really short section. Why so short, man?
* [1] Land on a Go to Jail Spot
It's just a picture? That's, uh, BAD.
* [5] Arrest
Again short, but not as short as the "telling the police" section. I have a tough time grading short sections because, really, what else is there to say?
* [7] Step 2: Bail out in Court
Interesting section. Got a chuckle out of me, I would say.
* [2] Step 3: Escape
It's one line long? Isn't this supposed to be the whole point of the article?
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| - (6+7+7+4+1+5+7+2)/8 round1
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| - Well, I'm guessing that if you cleaned up your article, the score would go from 23.6 to (4.9+5+7+7+) round1, a vast improvement. If you lengthened your article and added lots more original content, it would go from 29.9 to (8+5+7+7+) round1. Please come talk to me about specific questions. Sorry about the misunderstanding before...
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| - I'm new here, this is my first article, what d'ya guys think?-- 23:14, 26 November 2007 (UTC) I'm his adopter. Note that this is not plagiarism of the other articles of a similar name, it's just inspired by them. He wanted to make a version he liked better. 00:22, Nov 28 Okay, let me try that again. Nov 28, 01:21
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