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Do it or feel the oracle's wrath! 19:37, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

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rdfs:comment	Do it or feel the oracle's wrath! 19:37, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
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Mcomment	averaged
Pcomment	some grammar mistakes, etc., i'll give you a proofread. again, a bit short even for an unnews. other than that, formatted fine.
Icomment	the image works well. make it bigger if it's the only one, or add another one; maybe of a generic greek thing or the stock market.
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Ccomment	the credit crisis is an obvious target for parody, but i feel like you missed some opportunities. why are there still oracles in modern greece? who asked for this prediction? what else was predicted? your tone needs work, it should sound more newsy and professional, and avoid the second person . your title was unclear; was the oracle disgusted at both america and the destruction, or not? if not, i suggest moving the article to UnNews:Greek oracle disgusted at America; years of destruction ahead .
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Hcomment	well, this wasn't very humorous. it was basically just knocking americans a lot for being dumb, which is a bit beaten-to-death. i like the 'hospitality of canada' line, try to draw that out more, maybe even into a full section. on that note, expand; make your article longer than four small paragraphs. the specifics aren't mentioned: how did the oracle speed up the crash? interviews are always good in unnewses; try one with the oracle and one with an american stock person maybe.
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Fcomment	my preview button tells me that your score is 28.8, which suggests a rewrite. it feels like you really didn't spend a lot of time on this article, so it wouldn't be so much a rewrite as it would continuing to work on it. draw it out more, give more specific examples of everything. spend some time trying to think of funny wasy to compare the societies of modern america with ancient greece to tie the article ideas together.
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abstract	Do it or feel the oracle's wrath! 19:37, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

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