Wanted a review for this, because people seem to like it a lot on it's talk page. Whatever.
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| - Wanted a review for this, because people seem to like it a lot on it's talk page. Whatever.
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| - kind of hard to read, with the short sentences and such. my reviews now come with a complimentary proofread so i'll go through and touch up the comma usage, etc. the large image was fine.
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| - i think one image is enough for this one. i do like it, but i wonder which of the characters the narrator is. try referencing that in the caption.
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| - i will say, this article is rather good. i like the initial incident of a guy needing to walk in one direction . i also like the buildup, with the man eventually revealing himself to be quite mad, needing to go to the north pole. however, i think the buildup could be layed out better. everything up until the fat part is good, but then i'd like to see a hint of craziness...then a shadow of craziness...then the north pole...then why he needs to get to the north pole...then some ridiculous time restriction or something. i think you could have a lot of fun with it. i'll also say that if you are indeed trying to make the narrator seem quite insane, then the vulgarities take away from it. instead of 'oh shit, a wall', try 'bollocks' or 'blast'. crazy people always tend to say such things.
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| - my preview button tells me that your score is 35.7. this is a rather good article, and it's grown on me since i first read it. some improved prose, a better caption, and some more buildup will help it. i gather you're looking for VFH. i'd like to think that this article would do well. in fact, i'd be willing to nom it after it's improved some. i'm going to do a proofread edit and then a tweaks edit . good luck, and if you need anything else, just pick up the Gerryphone and dial 30.
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| - Wanted a review for this, because people seem to like it a lot on it's talk page. Whatever.
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