EpicWinner (talk) 22:51, March 16, 2014 (UTC) I've got this. I'm using the old template to do it; if you don't like it feel free to meet me in the car park for a brief and violent exchange of views. -- 18:08, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
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| - EpicWinner (talk) 22:51, March 16, 2014 (UTC) I've got this. I'm using the old template to do it; if you don't like it feel free to meet me in the car park for a brief and violent exchange of views. -- 18:08, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
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| - Your prose is generally fine I will, as always, recommend that you proofread this carefully to make sure that there are no lingering errors in the spelling and grammar. From my initial reading I could see a couple of errors, so make sure you proofread carefully after any major revisions, if proofreading isn't your thing ask someone else if they wouldn't mind helping. In terms of formatting you should try to avoid putting a template directly opposite an image as it tends to squeeze the text into the middle of the page, spread things out and the article becomes a whole lot easier on the eyes. Otherwise your images are well spaced, just consider where they end up if you make any significant revisions, it's easy to forget about formatting when you're focussing on the writing, but articles have been voted down on VFH for less.
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| - The concept for the article is simple and is something I've seen attempted in a lot of different forms during my time on the wiki. The style you're using is good, but I can't help but feel a different way of executing it may help you. What I mean by this is that you could adopt a particular persona when writing the article, this is one of my favourite ways of writing that I never seem to have gotten round to attempting properly. You could write it from the point of view of someone born in the early 2000's who doesn't appreciate what the 90's was about and makes no secret of this in his/her writing "People in the 90's would write about their drab colourless lives on paper, if you can imagine such a thing, it's so analogue only old people and the bourgeoisie use paper". There is a whole host of ways to convey your point, be it through an interesting way of presenting the article or through the persona you use to present it. The most important thing to remember is to be consistent in your tone whatever you choose. If you're writing and satirising wikipedia, bad language and juvenile writing can spoil your article even if the jokes they are being used in are excellent. Have a read of some of our best articles for some ideas. If you see one you like, copy it, use that authors style to create your own.
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| - This isn't by any means a bad article. It's a good first effort, I can assure you that it's very rare to have someone arrive on the wiki and immediately start writing amazing articles, I certainly didn't and don't be upset that you haven't either. You definitely have the potential to turn this into something that we'd be proud to display on the front page, but if it is to reach that point you need to work at it. Consider what I've said, my advice is just that, I can't command you to change the article and even if I could I wouldn't; it is important for you to decide for yourself what you want to write and more importantly how you wish to write it. There's always help available here if you'd like it, just ask someone, if they can't help or don't want to ask someone else! Most of us are more than happy to help people improve. If you have any questions or comments about this review then by all means let me know on my talk page. Good luck making any changes.
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| - EpicWinner (talk) 22:51, March 16, 2014 (UTC) I've got this. I'm using the old template to do it; if you don't like it feel free to meet me in the car park for a brief and violent exchange of views. -- 18:08, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
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