Go ahead. Tell me how good this is. :P Fist of Judgement 22:10, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
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| - Go ahead. Tell me how good this is. :P Fist of Judgement 22:10, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
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| - Avg’d as per Pee Review requirements.
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| - Not bad at all, and all the images are definitely relevant. Throwing in the right-left-right-left helped this article flow, something I was glad to see. The one-liner jokes were all there, which was good. The only problem in this category comes with the last picture . The problem is that the reader didn’t “do” anything, and it seems a bit inconsistent with the tone of the article
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| - Whooo, what a concept. While I do not think Sarcasm can be placed merrily into this article, you did a decent job of throwing the humour in with its own eclectic spin. While the article does not need too much work, I would suggest throwing in a few more jabs here and there. Honestly, I am almost jealous of this aticle, honestly, I never would have thought of this article
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| - I will admit that I am glad to see a well written article, specifically one with a nice snap to it, but as with any average article, the humour is good, but not great. If I had to say what my favorite part was, it would definitely have been the “Santa isn’t real” part. I liked how you took the spin of Santa not just existing and turned him into some sort of monster, specifically the Name Change to make him more “Saint Nickey” for lack of a better term. .
The rest of the article had decent amounts of humour mixed in around, the jokes about making yourself seem smart and “fooling” the guy into believing you didn’t get too old, and was spread decently around.
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| - I don’t want to take too much more of your time, so here is what you could do, in a can.
:#Fix the grammar errors
:#Reread HTBFANJS and peel the article up a bit more
:#Expand the Misc section a bit more, and make it into a story rather then a one liner, but don’t use all four, that would make the article too long!
:#Fix the last image
:#Treat yourself to a nice cookie or something for writing such a good article.
I thank you a lot for this excellent read over breakfast, and am looking forward to seeing this work its way onto VFH Good luck!
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| - Go ahead. Tell me how good this is. :P Fist of Judgement 22:10, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
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