Sometimes the truth is stranger than fiction, the only problem I know I have is the picture, but I am too afraid to image search Man-boobs on google. -- 21:15, 21 June 2008 (UTC) Sure thing. I've looked it over, and I'll give it a go. I'll try to finish it today or tomorrow. 17:10, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
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| - Sometimes the truth is stranger than fiction, the only problem I know I have is the picture, but I am too afraid to image search Man-boobs on google. -- 21:15, 21 June 2008 (UTC) Sure thing. I've looked it over, and I'll give it a go. I'll try to finish it today or tomorrow. 17:10, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
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| - I really like the Travolta pic. A good caption too. The only idea I have is to try and find a picture of a man that looks how your substitute teacher is described, instead of the Travolta pic. I'm not sure if this would be any better than what you have now though, so if you look into it, and decide the one you have now is better, stick with it. It's a good one.
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| - I think you chose a great article to do an UnNews story on. It is funny. Like I said earlier though, I am afraid you are just re-writing the story with too little of your own voice comming through. I have one idea, which would be a slight edit on the title. Instead of UnNews: Man fired for having girlie parts, I think UnNews: Teacher fired for having girlie parts would be a bit funnier. It makes the reader wonder about why a teacher would be fired for having girlie parts, and bring them in. Then, they would get that it is a man after a few sentences. This would be your choice of course, and your title is already pretty good, so it isn't a huge deal.
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| - I like what you have here. The humor is there, and your concept is strong. I just think that your prose and formatting through some of it can improve. If that improves, I think a few of your scores would go up. I'd love to see what you do with it if you edit it. Its not too bad now. If you have any questions, or comments about anything, please let me know on my talk page. Enjoy.
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| - Sometimes the truth is stranger than fiction, the only problem I know I have is the picture, but I am too afraid to image search Man-boobs on google. -- 21:15, 21 June 2008 (UTC) Sure thing. I've looked it over, and I'll give it a go. I'll try to finish it today or tomorrow. 17:10, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
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