Its the first article I've written on this site; so I'd like to get it reviewed by some more experienced members who can give me advice on how to improve. --Iwritewhatiwant 19:11, September 11, 2011 (UTC)
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| - Its the first article I've written on this site; so I'd like to get it reviewed by some more experienced members who can give me advice on how to improve. --Iwritewhatiwant 19:11, September 11, 2011 (UTC)
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| - How many STDs I assume Russell has
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| - So, I noticed a lot of places where you could use some good ol' punctuation, like commas, periods, things like that, such as before conjunctions or between sentences. I would just re-read the article and make you've gotten rid of any of those problems, like here, "Most recently he played the part of Arthur, in the film - Arthur. A title that can only be described as a masterpiece of wit." That period before "A title" is out of place. You have other examples like this throughout the article, just re-read and fix them and you should be fine. I already fixed some small things for you, least I could do.
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| - Good use of images, don't need to add any more. I would suggest though that you use the same principle I suggested before, which is you shorten your sentences. For example, the picture of Manuel, maybe something like, "Hello, Fawtly Towers. Oh, you had sex with my grand-daughter? This is very rude sir I-What? Oh no, don't call Mr. Fawlty please!" Or something with a little bit better flow. All the captions with the pictures seem to have this issue, so if you could work on the flow a little bit, they'd be perfect.
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| - It's the hair, it just gets me. That, and the fact that you did a really good job with this article, congratulations. Just follow the advice I give you above and see if you can't turn this article into the winner I know she be, or he, I don't really care about specifics.
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| - So, first off, really sorry it took me forever to get this review to you. I've been so busy lately and plus, this article is really long and I wanted to give you a really good review, since I think this article has so much potential in it to become a VFH. Anyways, any questions, comments, angry letter-bombs, just put them on my talkpage and I'll get back to you. Good work here by the way, really wood gork. Wait that's not right...
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| - Its the first article I've written on this site; so I'd like to get it reviewed by some more experienced members who can give me advice on how to improve. --Iwritewhatiwant 19:11, September 11, 2011 (UTC) Experienced? Member? These are unfamiliar words to me, but I'm going to review it anyways. -- 19:45, September 14, 2011 (UTC) How long do these reviews normally take? If something has happened then I know a very good florist who does a very reasonable rate on wreaths. I would also be more than happy to drive the hearse - I've never driven around with a body in my boot (well, basically never) and would like to know what it feels like. --Writey 14:50, September 17, 2011 (UTC) Well, with me, 1-2 days, so you get Amazon shipping quality pretty much. Unfortunately, Classes have been a pain for me, but it's finally saturday, so I'll see to it that I get it done today. Sorry ol' matey, not doing my best this month. -- 15:40 , September 17, 2011 (UTC) Don't apologize! I'm just thrilled you're still in the realm of the living! Ah, I'm sure you're having a fine month, just imagine how much worse it would be if you were a woman. --Writey 16:26, September 17, 2011 (UTC) I....don't fucking believe it. I finished the review and safari quit on me....I'll...I'm going to go have a heartache now. I'll see if I restart today......why.......-- 18:15, September 19, 2011 (UTC) That'll teach you to use Apple products - you should know Steve Jobs hates you, he hates me, he even hates puppies. Use Chrome, Google's plan of world domination is much subtler. If you want we can go on IRC, Skype etc. and you could talk me through it, I just say that as I know what it feels like to have to write something all over again that you've just written, and also - I don't want to wait another week! --Writey 18:24, September 19, 2011 (UTC) I remember when I was using IE (lots of years ago). My edits used to get lost all the time. Now I use Firefox. It has this magical ability that prevents things from disappearing. 18:52, 19 September 2011 It also has this magical ability to break most of the scripts on this site, even the ones that work on IE without any special compatibility crap.
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