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| - This article is fully cited, has an extensive history section, has a storyline section instead of a jumbled, obsolete strategy guide, and has more than a dozen quality images. It should be the basis on which holiday event articles should be written. 01:46, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support as nominator. 01:47, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Looks good. 01:50, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - The Storyline is better than the strategy guide. Krayfish 01:56, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support, look well done. 01:59, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support looks like an article worthy of being showcased. File:Dragon 2h sword old.pngCallofduty4 Talk 02:25, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Weak support - imho, could be improved, but what the heck. It is one of the finest articles on the wiki. --クールネシトーク 21:05, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Pretty good article. Tien 16:30, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Nice article. ɳex undique 20:47, May 5, 2011 (UTC)
* NeutralSupport - Comments:
* Lead: "Snowballs returned in this event, but, unlike the ones from a snow globe, they could not be kept." They returned from what?
* Info box: The common name of the quest is 2009 Christmas event, right? I suggest the name at the top of the info box be changed to reflect the common one.
* Explain what the picture in the info box is supposed to be.
* Storyline: "The partygoers revealed to players that the cupboards... " Change the revealed to reveal, and check the storyline very carefully for other cases such as this.
* "player talk to the Queen of Snow, who is also Santa Claus's wife." That can go in the above sentence instead like this: "The partygoers revealed to players that the cupboards are entrances to the Land of Snow, where the Queen of Snow, Santa Claus's wife, was throwing a Christmas party and feast for all citizens of RuneScape." Sounds better to me.
* "rewards them with a scarf for the imp and a very large candy cane for the player." How about this: "rewards the imp with a scarf and the player with a candy cane."
* Rewards: Describe what the list is for. For example: "The rewards for the event are listed below."
* The description of the candy cane reward is far too detailed. Shorten it.
* Music: "Music tracks unlocked:" Explain further.
* History: Development: Remove the bit about the candy cane. This is about the 2009 Christmas event, not the 2008 one.
* History: Announcements: "The 2009 Christmas event was the first event to have a blog written about it." Cite this or remove.
* "Mod Edam said that new characters would be released with the event, but Jack Frost and snow imps, characters seen in a previous Christmas event, would have small cameos." Why not 2008 Christmas event instead of previous Christmas event?
* Why are players speculations on the RuneScape Forums talked about? I suggest removing all of it as it doesn't add much to the article at all.
* "Many users on the RuneScape Forums commented on the delay of the release of the event. The 2006, 2007, and 2008 Christmas events were all released on either the 16th or the 18th of December, but the 2009 Christmas event was released on the 21st. The 2009 Christmas event is the latest released Christmas event since 2004." Why are players comments on the forums notable? In addition, the last sentence needs to be clarified.
* "A few days later, on 24 December, Mark Gerhard and Andrew Gower gave Christmas wishes to the RuneScape community in a news post." What does that have to do with the Christmas event?
* History: Glitch: "and then quickly switched to another weapon (the most popular one being a godsword)," Cite that the godsword was the most popular one or remove. This list is not completely exhaustive, there are still other problems in it I've chose not to mention because this wiki isn't Wikipedia. I may have further comments later. Smithing 16:06, May 7, 2011 (UTC)
* Yay! Actual comments! I've done pretty much everything you've said; just a couple things:
* Info box: From what I've seen, it's always the official name, not the common one, that goes at the top of the infobox. (Correct me if I'm wrong).
* Glitch: I assumed that since the godsword was the item mentioned by Mod Edam in the FAQ that that could count as the citation. 14:49, May 8, 2011 (UTC)
* It looks pretty good.
* Info box: It doesn't really matter, I just find it makes more sense if the title of the article matches the title on the top of the info box.
* Development: Why is the bit about the candy cane still left?
* Glitch: Nowhere in the citation does it really suggest that the godsword is the most popular.
* Additional comments: The Criticism and Awards section should not be part of the history section, but rather a Reception section.
* Criticism: Can you also find some positive comments (from a reliable source)?
* References: I notice only reference 7 has the archived from the original mentioned, although others that were archived do not. Make the references consistent. Smithing 21:20, May 8, 2011 (UTC)
* And one more thing, I still think this sentence can be clarified further: "The 2009 Christmas event had the latest release of any Christmas event since 2004." Smithing 21:57, May 8, 2011 (UTC)
* Candy cane: Clarified so that the paragraph is more relevant to the 2009 event than the 2008 one.
* Godsword: Ahh, I was thinking of the wrong citation File:Lol.gif Fixed. Not very important anyway.
* Positive comments: Aside from the RuneScape Awards, you're not gonna find any. The FAQ only addressed complaints about the event, and that's really the only reliable source left.
* Reference 7: That'a a problem with the template, not the article itself. You might want to ask Gaz to fix it; it shouldn't be too tricky.
* Late release: Okay yeah, I suck at wording. If you can think of a good way to clarify that annoying sentence then go ahead, because I can't seem to be able to. 03:07, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
* Made some changes. I think it's good enough to be featured now. Smithing 21:48, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Good article. Orbwiki107 16:51, May 7, 2011 (UTC)
* support That C Teng is one smart wikian. You list problems, he fixes them instead of opposing. Good work C man.--Degenret01 03:38, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - It's a lot better than I expected. 06:46, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
* Closed - The article will be featured. File:Hunter cape (t).png Sentra246File:Blue hallowe'en mask.png 08:32, May 16, 2011 (UTC)
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