Fort James i will now commence reviewment of The Kansas City Shuffle. if you desire a review for Fort James as well, please make a separate pee review page for that article. Nice review Gerry. I did add a picture to the article myself a while back, but the author removed it with a rather rude comment. My best advice to this author would probably be to try being a bit nicer to other users. Doing so will make people more inclined to help improve this article. And... Yes my friend I did read the article, and agree it was not a "perfect" picture, but it was a hell of a lot better than nothing. I suggest you find what you think is a good image and add that using the syntax I showed you. Good luck. 17:52, Aug 13
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| - Fort James i will now commence reviewment of The Kansas City Shuffle. if you desire a review for Fort James as well, please make a separate pee review page for that article. Nice review Gerry. I did add a picture to the article myself a while back, but the author removed it with a rather rude comment. My best advice to this author would probably be to try being a bit nicer to other users. Doing so will make people more inclined to help improve this article. And... Yes my friend I did read the article, and agree it was not a "perfect" picture, but it was a hell of a lot better than nothing. I suggest you find what you think is a good image and add that using the syntax I showed you. Good luck. 17:52, Aug 13
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| - your article is just blocks of text. you don't have any categories or nearly enough links. your grammar and prose were just okay, check out UN:PS for help with that.
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| - no images! some ideas for images include: someone dancing, a shot of malcontent , and a ninja.
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*intro: 2
your intro is one sentence long, and all it states is that the kansas city shuffle is a dance move. it's not nearly humorous or informative enough. expand the intro, it is perhaps the most important section, as a good intro captures the reader's attention and makes the reader want to continue reading.
*about leeroy: 6.5
not too bad. but you don't give any info on who leeroy is. you should explain this in your intro, mentioning leeroy and his relation to the kansas city shuffle. the rest was rather okay; the jousting bit and things like that were not too random as to be bad.
*the shuffle: 5
you kind of tail off into randomness at the end. the beginning was better, with the description of the actual dance, and the reference to lucky number slevin was good , but if the other quotes are actually from the song, they went over my head. if the song has relevant lyrics, put them in the article, or make a separate article and link to it.
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| - my preview button tells me that your final score is 18.2, placing this article between 'probably VFD/NRV' and 'might be VFD/NRV/rewrite'. however, you got hurt a lot by having no images, and fairly bad prose & formatting. fixing this stuff up will help improve your score. as far as the article itself, i think you should make it longer. throw in more sections, like famous uses of the dance and likewise. i recommend reading HTBFANJS often, especially just before you work on your article. i think that this can become an adequate entry with some work. if you need further assistance, you can contact me on my talk page.
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| - Fort James i will now commence reviewment of The Kansas City Shuffle. if you desire a review for Fort James as well, please make a separate pee review page for that article. Nice review Gerry. I did add a picture to the article myself a while back, but the author removed it with a rather rude comment. My best advice to this author would probably be to try being a bit nicer to other users. Doing so will make people more inclined to help improve this article. And... Yes my friend I did read the article, and agree it was not a "perfect" picture, but it was a hell of a lot better than nothing. I suggest you find what you think is a good image and add that using the syntax I showed you. Good luck. 17:52, Aug 13
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