So, if you've been watching me lately (you know who you are), you'll know I haven't written anything in a while. Why? Because of lots of glasses of water with strange chemicals in them, and, more importantly, fucking huge writer's block as a result of two features in a week. This is my extremely weak dust-blowing effort to gear myself up somewhat. I got this. Picked up your rather subtle hint in an edit summary someplace and there is nothing else even remotly worthy of my attention. Will be tomorrow as I'm sleepy but I wanna do it. 21:33 7 July 2008
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| - So, if you've been watching me lately (you know who you are), you'll know I haven't written anything in a while. Why? Because of lots of glasses of water with strange chemicals in them, and, more importantly, fucking huge writer's block as a result of two features in a week. This is my extremely weak dust-blowing effort to gear myself up somewhat. I got this. Picked up your rather subtle hint in an edit summary someplace and there is nothing else even remotly worthy of my attention. Will be tomorrow as I'm sleepy but I wanna do it. 21:33 7 July 2008
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| - One of the bigger problems I noticed was that the “story” seemed to be torn between past and present. From reading the opening paragraph or so I got the impression it was set sort of in the dark ages or medieval times. But then later on you mention very modern things like TV and petrol which felt completely out of place in the setting you appear to have set up. Superficially what I’m about to say may seem contradictory but I liked the bit Because you were dropping in a modern theme into an unmodern set, which can work out very funny. To unmodernise the petrol idea maybe have him ask for “Carrots! Enough to feed my horses for a year” and “Horses! Enough to feed my family for a year!” maybe not the second idea, just thought I’d throw it out there .
doesn’t feel like a question, Maybe introduce a sign saying “No Tree Chopping” or have a guy chained to the tree in protest to make the link to .
Another minor thing, I’d have this bit read like this Subtle change but I think that’s more funny.
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| - Your first image was good, nicely depicting Mr Judge and the caption was ok too just not side-splitting or anything, I felt it was more parenthesis . The second one was similar except the caption was funnier. Giving a seven cos I feel there probably should be another pic. Maybe move the rat picture up a bit and then introduce the maiden or the evil dude as a hilarious unexpected guest-star? Or just a raccoon.
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| - I liked this concept, I thought it was certainly very original. You had some good ideas, some of which need a bit of shoogaling as I explained in a moment .
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| - This was funny, most of my improvement suggestions have ended up in Prose and Formatting but I will say I think you could maybe have expanded the idea of the damsel towards the end. As it is it sounds a bit too nonchalant. Continuing with my “Modern theme in an unmodern setting” point from later can I suggest the maiden runs away to file sexual harassment charges instead of just running away?
Also I liked the recurring theme of the rats, that was good for the scene as rats were feared in the dark ages. Was a nice little touch I thought.
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| - If you’d like to thank/ask/insult me about anything you know where to find me! Sorry this took me longer than I intended I’m just insanely easily distracted. Also do you like the new sig ? How about my new article?
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| - So, if you've been watching me lately (you know who you are), you'll know I haven't written anything in a while. Why? Because of lots of glasses of water with strange chemicals in them, and, more importantly, fucking huge writer's block as a result of two features in a week. This is my extremely weak dust-blowing effort to gear myself up somewhat. I got this. Picked up your rather subtle hint in an edit summary someplace and there is nothing else even remotly worthy of my attention. Will be tomorrow as I'm sleepy but I wanna do it. 21:33 7 July 2008
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