I feel I could have taken this further. Any thoughts? 14:12, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Cancer is racist
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| - I feel I could have taken this further. Any thoughts? 14:12, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
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| - lower than average for being not 'there'. see final comments.
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| - formatted well small grammar/spelling mistakes that will be cleared up by my proofread.
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| - just the one image. it was relevant, but the caption wasn't anything great. i'm torn on whether you should stick with one, or add another one . it's your call on the image count, but i think i', leaning towards one upon further thought.
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| - i like the concept very much, you've taken a real news article and skewered it in proper unnews fashion. your tone is spot on professional newsy.
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| - an average amount of humor, but i do agree with you that this can be taken further. i like to do good/not-so-good lists when reviewing UnNewses, so...
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'racially motivated'. further investigations of feelings towards other cultures. the program cancer will be required to endure. cancer being replaced in the horoscopes.
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. the reference to the british national party was lost on me . if the bnp is in fact really right-wing, maybe reword it to say 'although it is not believed to be so conservative as to have any links to the British National Party'. 'stuffy, white, upper class, hereditary peer' could use a better white guy joke. cancer being replaced in the horoscopes by 'that crab thing'; i think the idea is good, but maybe replace it with 'melanoma' or another disease, or something else entirely. i'm not sure why it would be banned from television and the like.
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| - my preview button tells me that your score is 35. i like this article a lot but feel that it could be expanded and slightly revamped into an awesome article that will almost surely pass VFH. ideas for extra paragraphs: reaction from prominent black people and organizations . a reference to breast/ovarian cancer being sexist? . a report of disturbing trends among the declining number of gang members . good article, i hope to see it on VFH in the near future. good luck!
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| - I feel I could have taken this further. Any thoughts? 14:12, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
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