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| - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Gina the No-Headed Gymnast Olympic Ready
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| - Smuggler 09:47, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
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| - you had a few prose mistakes, i'll run it through the UN:PS for you. the one image is extremely gigantic; it squishes eveything else to the side. i would recommend shrinking the image and seeing if you can come up with another one; try UN:PIC to request something. after that, i would add some content; maybe s few more paragraphs. things like her past olympic experience or somesuch would work well.
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| - you just have the one image, but it fits extremely well, and contributes to the article with a good caption to boot. having said that, i again think you need to find another image; there has to be tons of images of gymnasts out there. chop one to make it look like a headless gymnast, or request one, again at UN:PIC
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| - this article is pretty solid humor-wise. the subtle references to the no-headedness are much better than blatant jokes. however, i think a one blatant joke wouldn't go amiss . but the way you approach it is great; i didn't even see the tears line coming, and it took me a second to realize it. however, i had to look up what an opthamologist was; you should perhaps link to eye or this wikipedia page. i would say this is funny enough for the unnews front page , but a little short for the main page. also, the acronym for UCLA kinda rubbed me the wrong way, as do pretty much any made-up acronyms. i think they work better if they're closer to reality, like if most of the words are aren't changed from what they really are .
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| - my preview button tells me that your score is 34.4, placing your article right around the 'adequate, the average article' range. i think that it works very well as it is. if you're looking for a VFH run, then i would try those things i suggested i'll do some proofreading for you in a few minutes. if you need anything else, you can find me on my talk page. good luck!
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