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| - I've listed this article for peer review because I want to hear others' opinions about this article, so I can improve it. Thanks, Yerevanci (talk) 18:23, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
* See WP:LEAD for recommendations on numbers of paragraphs for this length of article.
* "In 1912-1913" needs to be an en-dash here per WP:DASH.
* "Andranik in Paris, 1921." no full stop required in this caption as it's not a complete sentence. Check all other captions.
* "which was about to wipe off Armenia from the face of the Earth." true as it may be, this is a somewhat emotive way of putting it. Try to keep the tone neutral.
* "Andranik combated in " -> "Andranik fought in "
* "and died 5 years " 5->five.
* Avoid squashing text between images/infobox etc.
* Some of the early parts of Early life appear unreferenced.
* "which he later leaves" -> "which he would later leave"
* "first name - even " en-dash, not hyphen.
* "gave a signal to the hidden fedayees......" then what?
* Don't overlink articles, e.g. you link Macedonian-Adrianopolitan militia twice in quick succession.
* Early parts of Life in exile appear unreferenced.
* Also, consider merging the first couple of short paras.
* "The New York Times reported," -> "The New York Times reported,"
* Legacy in Armenia section is unreferenced.
* The list of quotes is, well, mildly interesting but the article would be better served by integrating some of these quotes into the main article to provide a good context.
* "Avetis Aharonyan, [48]" (and all the others), no comma needed, not space between the name and the ref.
* Online sources should have publishers, authors (where possible), dates of publication (where possible) and access dates. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:59, 3 July 2012 (UTC)
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