I have just given the page a good shot or two of humor and now I think it's ready for the main space. Let me know what you think, thanks! 00:18, 26 April 2008 (UTC) Thanks for the help! But I don't need any more pee. PF4Eva Thank you! I think I have everything fixed now. I'm gonna move it to the main space and see what everybody else thinks about the humor. 21:17, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
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| - I have just given the page a good shot or two of humor and now I think it's ready for the main space. Let me know what you think, thanks! 00:18, 26 April 2008 (UTC) Thanks for the help! But I don't need any more pee. PF4Eva Thank you! I think I have everything fixed now. I'm gonna move it to the main space and see what everybody else thinks about the humor. 21:17, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
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| - Most of the prose seems consistently "professional," as one would expect to find in an encyclopedia or biography. Some of it doesn't, like "Least that's what you'd fucking think!" or "He got fired after forgetting to fart." Breaking out of a professional tone into something else can be funny, but you have to establish the tone, first. Anyway, though, the prose is pretty much adequate.
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| - Some of the images are the best part of this piece, I think. The "F-I-N G-E-R P-E-N-I-S" picture was particularly amusing. I liked the "Mr. *ice guy" photo, but it's not captioned ideally, I think - the idea that Niceguy held a job as Rice-O-Roni is perhaps a little too weird to be funny.
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| - Sorry, man, but I think this one needs to go all the way back to the drawing board. Or maybe to the drawing board for the first time, because that's the main problem with the article: it seems like you started writing it with very little plan for what it was going to be. I think the first thing you've got to ask yourself is "What is this a parody of?" Go from there.
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| - I have just given the page a good shot or two of humor and now I think it's ready for the main space. Let me know what you think, thanks! 00:18, 26 April 2008 (UTC) Thanks for the help! But I don't need any more pee. PF4Eva Thank you! I think I have everything fixed now. I'm gonna move it to the main space and see what everybody else thinks about the humor. 21:17, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
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