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| - This is one of those surprisingly detailed, informative, lengthy, well written historical type articles. It details the history if this item and its' effect on the current state of Gielinor. It is a clean article and is one of our better works. (I was actually led to this by one of our contest entrants going into detail about how good it was.)--Degenret01 06:21, July 7, 2011 (UTC) Closed - Staff of armadyl will be featured. 222 talk 11:13, September 9, 2011 (UTC)
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| - This is one of those surprisingly detailed, informative, lengthy, well written historical type articles. It details the history if this item and its' effect on the current state of Gielinor. It is a clean article and is one of our better works. (I was actually led to this by one of our contest entrants going into detail about how good it was.)--Degenret01 06:21, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Surprisingly in-depth and detailed. 09:34, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
* Comments: I made a few minor changes to the article.
* Do a copyedit of the whole article.
* Lead: Include some history and background in the lead section.
* "is a quest item used in the quest Temple of Ikov". The word "quest" is in the sentence twice, and makes it sound a little repetitive. I'd recommend removing the one before the quest name from the lead.
* What's the [sic] doing after the item's name?
* "You" may not be the most appropriate word to use. Consider replacing or removing it.
* Background and history: "the temple" is in the second paragraph of the section four times.
* 3rd paragraph: "And" is not the best way to start the sentence.
* 5th paragraph: "including the most other Mahjarrat". Don't understand what is meant by that. The word "And" is used to start a sentence in the paragraph as well.
* 8th paragraph: The "you" is not the most appropriate word to use there.
* I'd recommend rewriting other parts of this section as well.
* Current role in the game: 3rd paragraph: Add a citation for the quote, per RS:SG/C.
* "attain near godhood". What is meant by that?
* 4th paragraph: Instead of just posting the link, consider adding additional parameters, in case of link rot.
* Cite the "This was probably Lucien." part, or remove it.
* Clarify the final sentence of the paragraph. The use of the word "you" may not be appropriate in the sentence as well.
* Trivia: Cite the "looked no different than a normal staff" part, or remove it. Smithing (talk | contribs) 19:15, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - I would support it even without changes. It really doesn't matter to me if everything is done completely perfectly. --クールネシトーク 09:32, July 12, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Extremely detailed and informative. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by 220.255.2.42 (talk).
* Weak support - It's detailed alright, but I just wonder if there's extra stuff to add. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Rhys Jones (talk) on 15:54, September 3, 2011 (UTC). Wow, was I drunk when I typed that? So grammatically embarrassing... :( File:Broav pet.png Rhys Talk File:Completionist cape.png 16:40, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - Really well written and has a great layout. Nothing much that can be improved. File:Hunter cape (t).png Sentra246File:Blue hallowe'en mask.png 02:36, September 4, 2011 (UTC)
* Support - well written, and interesting File:King Roald chathead.png King TALKWer den König nicht ehrt, ist nicht Lebenswert. 00:11, September 9, 2011 (UTC) Closed - Staff of armadyl will be featured. 222 talk 11:13, September 9, 2011 (UTC)
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