Alright, Senor Awesome, here are my critiques: Quotes 1+2 = lose 'em. The third one is awesome. Your sections need to be fleshed out farther. This article does contain a really interesting concept though; a contributor creating an article about one's self to try to make themselves look cooler than they actually are (evident in the intro's last sentences). I think if you continued under that idea, there would be great potential for funny. Do some work detailing your current sections, and maybe add a few other ones. A list of super powers is fine, but if there isn't sufficient material to balance, it just looks like a way to pad out a short piece. Unlike some editors, I enjoy a well crafted short article, but this one isn't there just yet.