Many people will take criticism personally, it's better to offer friendly advice than a personality assassination over someone's hard work. * Good: I think there are too many allusions to the book Star Wars vs. Spider-Man: The Ultimate Showdown that many people would not understand. Try to make the humour more accessible and it will appeal to a larger audience. * Bad: What the hell is this shit? Whoever wrote this is clearly a fat virgin nerd who has never read anything in their life except some Star Wars crap and the words "Frosted Flakes".