I've rewritten it the moment I've seen it. I think it looks a lot better but you be the judge. -00:34, 19 February 2008 (UTC) As requested, UU's review factory will be processing this shortly. -- 10:55, Feb 24 Right, here we go. First off, you're missing a couple of classic Gordon mannerisms - his habit of calling guys "big boy" all the time, and his habit of saying "yes?" after every instruction or question. Rectify this to make it sound a bit more authentic. And as always: this is only my opinion, others are available. And good luck! -- 11:47, Feb 24